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A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

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lewist
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A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#1 Post by lewist » April 29th, 2008, 8:41 pm

From Wikipedia:
Senryū (川柳, literally 'river willow') is a Japanese form of short poetry similar to haiku in construction: three lines with 17 or fewer "on" (not syllables) in total. However, senryū tend to be about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature, and senryū are often cynical or darkly humorous while haiku are serious. Senryū do not need to include a kigo, or season word, like haiku.
The idea is to write senryu and post them. Here's an example of the form:

The great purpose here (5 syllables)
Is to state ideas in (7 syllables)
Fine elegant verse. (5 syllables)

I suggest we start with an idea, what was good or bad about our day, and go from there. Let's keep it to syllables for simplicity. I have a problem with the less than seventeen syllables idea and prefer the classical 5-7-5 syllable form. It makes it more of a discipline.

So to start:

Today with my son
I walked in rain soaked forest,
Damply discussing.


As they say, things can only get better!
Carpe diem. Savour every moment.

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wattsll
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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#2 Post by wattsll » April 29th, 2008, 9:03 pm

Far from my homeland
under a sky full of dust,
I toil and wait.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#3 Post by Emma Woolgatherer » April 29th, 2008, 9:35 pm

When work is irksome
Counting pretty syllables
Is such a comfort

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#4 Post by Bryn » April 29th, 2008, 10:41 pm


Innovative games
can be educational.
This one is pointless.




:exit:

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#5 Post by Maria Mac » April 29th, 2008, 11:28 pm

Do senryu have titles? If so, this one's called 'poker'.

I won my first game
But then lost two in a row.
Still in profit, though.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#6 Post by wattsll » April 30th, 2008, 12:12 am

I woke up to pee
after, sleep eluded me
now I surf the web.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#7 Post by jaywhat » April 30th, 2008, 6:00 am

I used to write words
like onomatopoeia
without a spellcheck

up this morning to
complete my self assessment
bloody site was down

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#8 Post by Noggin » April 30th, 2008, 4:51 pm

My arm hurt today
Rather more than yesterday
But less than Monday.
It is the still and silent sea that drowns a man. -- Old Norse Proverb

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#9 Post by Maria Mac » May 1st, 2008, 8:41 am

The worst thing today
was having to leave my cats
at the cattery

:boohoo:

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#10 Post by Maria Mac » May 1st, 2008, 4:07 pm

The best thing today
was travelling to Shetland
to meet Alan C.

:nod:

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#11 Post by lewist » May 1st, 2008, 4:42 pm

[center]The Community Car Scheme

From the Forest Corps
Came their husbands, the war brides
I'm driving today.[/size]


[quote="Maria"]Do senryu have titles?...[/quote]
Yes, Maria, I don't see why we shouldn't have titles.[/center]
Carpe diem. Savour every moment.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#12 Post by Thomas » May 3rd, 2008, 5:02 pm

I spend many days
Just getting old too quickly.
Today was the same.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#13 Post by lewist » May 3rd, 2008, 7:44 pm

For Thomas

I know that feeling,
The days piling on to bring
Important birthdays.


Or should that last line be...

Unwanted birthdays. ???
Carpe diem. Savour every moment.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#14 Post by wattsll » May 3rd, 2008, 8:18 pm

Unwanted birthdays
might be said to bring wisdom
but joint pain comes too.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#15 Post by Jem » May 5th, 2008, 10:36 am

Winter colds are bad
But summer colds are far worse
They just don't seem fair.

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#16 Post by Lifelinking » May 5th, 2008, 11:55 am

Once a lonely sheep
Dreamed of a companion
Wouldn't ewe do too?

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William McIlvanney

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#17 Post by thundril » July 6th, 2008, 4:35 am

Not sure I can do this-
I've only just got the hang of
Sudoku

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#18 Post by jaywhat » July 6th, 2008, 6:08 am

found poem
Luo Jinquan carries
baskets of sheep dung all day
crossing the river


from Guardian Weekend

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#19 Post by thundril » July 6th, 2008, 3:36 pm

The dance the All-Blacks do
before a match-
Is this what's called a haiku?

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Re: A challenge - the Write a Senryū game

#20 Post by thundril » July 6th, 2008, 3:37 pm

Adopt Japanese art-forms?
No theatre
is better than our own

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